Search
 
 

Display results as :
 


Rechercher Advanced Search

Latest topics
» Boooooooooooo!
Thu Mar 22, 2012 2:17 pm by Hotrock

» New Magazine
Sun Nov 13, 2011 4:46 pm by Brother Jeff

» A Question
Tue Oct 04, 2011 11:13 pm by Brother Jeff

» A Pretty Cool Idea
Mon Oct 03, 2011 6:43 pm by Brother Jeff

» Hello People
Thu Sep 29, 2011 9:39 pm by Brother Jeff

» 72 Hours To Make a film
Thu Sep 29, 2011 9:37 pm by Brother Jeff

» I opened an Etsy Shop
Wed Aug 10, 2011 6:22 pm by Brother Jeff

» Golf Balls
Thu Jul 28, 2011 8:06 pm by admin

» Early Retirement
Thu Jul 28, 2011 8:01 pm by admin

Shopmotion


Navigation
 Portal
 Index
 Memberlist
 Profile
 FAQ
 Search

Names Change

View previous topic View next topic Go down

Names Change

Post  admin on Tue Nov 02, 2010 1:52 am

Sam had joined up one morning
Though his name would not remain Sam
His sergeant would call him many things
but it changed once the fighting began

A few would call him a hero
But two would call him their son
No-one would ever call him daddy
Not once the fighting’s begun

An easier life than back home, he’d read
Within weeks he’d be marching through France
A boy with a gun is a man they’d said
just point it and shoot to advance

The enemy eat babies they’d told him
He believed them and why should he not?
He was perfectly willing to take the kings shilling
But soon he would wish he had not.

The fields of France were no picnic
What with the bullets and all
But the enemy ate babies they’d told him
And he believed, as he watched his friends fall

The trenches were cold wet and miserable
The bullets flew thick night and day
The shelling was constant and terrible
And peace was a long dream away

It would all be over by Christmas
That’s what they told them back home
but home was not here and they could not hear
the screams and the bombs and the fear

As parts of his friends fell about him
The screaming of all filled his ears
Sam prayed to his God to spare him
Or at least make it all dissapear

A dignified death was denied him
But death indeed he did gain
And Sam was just one amongst many
To die in the mud with his name

John Doe he is now amongst thousands
And thousands of comrade in arms
Row upon row upon row upon row
Upon row upon row of Johns Doe.


Last edited by admin on Sun Nov 07, 2010 4:55 am; edited 1 time in total
avatar
admin
Admin

Posts : 100
Join date : 2010-10-12
Age : 58
Location : Central UK

View user profile http://write4fun.ezboard.in

Back to top Go down

Re: Names Change

Post  Moliz on Sat Nov 06, 2010 6:59 am

OMG, this is so good! This brought tears...it honestly did. You should submit this somewhere. Yes, I do mean that! I've been watching a series on the History Channel about WWII and in one episode about the invasion of Normandy, the narrator reads a poem titled "Carentan, Oh Carentan" written by one of the soldiers about the battle there and your poem reminded me of that one. And yours is even better, poetry-wise. And yours is powerful. That last verse-wow.

Good, good, very, very good. What made you write about this topic?
avatar
Moliz

Posts : 34
Join date : 2010-10-14
Location : South Carolina

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Names Change

Post  aL1801 on Sat Nov 06, 2010 11:33 pm

I'm blown away by this poem, Admin. It is so, so true.
A lot of writers on WW1 seem to gloss over the real horrors - it's easy for movie scriptwriters to depict a dying soldier either collapsing on the ground, or lying with his head in a buiddy's arms, saying: "Look after Lily and the kids..." and dies, cleanly and with dignity.
Nowhere do get a picture of a group of men doing something and then being blown to smithereens their bodies fuzed together like bacon pieces in a frying pan.

Then there are the psychologically wounded soldiers who live and relive the traumas. The folks at home who only know their man is missing presumed killed, lying in the fields with no marker or a place in a vet's cemetery.
Peace in our time is a pipedream - when will we ever learn. The vets of WW1 are all rest now - may they enjoy their time in "Valhalla"

This Thurday is Nov 11 - Remembrance Day/Armistice Day/Veterans' Day.

Lest We Forget








avatar
aL1801

Posts : 31
Join date : 2010-10-12
Location : Bathurst, NSW, Land Of Oz

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Names Change

Post  admin on Sun Nov 07, 2010 4:53 am

Veterans day was looming and I had joined a forum with a veterans thread.
They held a friendly poetry competition that was open to everyone and this was my submission.

I think this is my most moving piece of writing to date and I am quite proud of it.

I must admit I had a lump in my throat by the time i had it finished.

One day i intend to attempt setting it to music.

avatar
admin
Admin

Posts : 100
Join date : 2010-10-12
Age : 58
Location : Central UK

View user profile http://write4fun.ezboard.in

Back to top Go down

Re: Names Change

Post  old Gray Mare on Sun Nov 07, 2010 5:40 pm

Good work, Rob!
avatar
old Gray Mare
Admin

Posts : 186
Join date : 2010-10-12
Location : Central NC

View user profile http://www.donnacampbellsmith.com

Back to top Go down

Re: Names Change

Post  isis_smee on Wed Nov 24, 2010 2:50 am

LOOOOVVE ITT!!
avatar
isis_smee

Posts : 54
Join date : 2010-10-13
Age : 21
Location : bathurst, nsw, australia

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Names Change

Post  Moliz on Tue Dec 21, 2010 4:22 am

I hope you won the competition!! You should have.
avatar
Moliz

Posts : 34
Join date : 2010-10-14
Location : South Carolina

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Names Change

Post  Brother Jeff on Wed Dec 22, 2010 5:57 pm

I think this would be pretty cool set to music. When can we expect the CD to be out? lol Very Happy
avatar
Brother Jeff

Posts : 178
Join date : 2010-10-16
Age : 49
Location : Martinsburg

View user profile http://www.jrslaterphotography.com

Back to top Go down

Re: Names Change

Post  Sponsored content


Sponsored content


Back to top Go down

View previous topic View next topic Back to top

- Similar topics

 
Permissions in this forum:
You cannot reply to topics in this forum